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She walks across the water
Escaping damnation
Praying that she doesn’t falter
Running from the flames of incrimination.

She races against the sands of time
Thorns prick against her heels.
She muddles through the muck and grime
But she finally feels.
©2006-2009 ~FiendishReflections
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This is my first real attempt at using a fixed rhyming scheme. It is rather simplistic but need not be lengthy to convey a powerful message.

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:iconleifhawk:
Nice! I like it! I understand how difficult it is to stick to a definite rhyme scheme, so good job :)

In my opinion though, the word "muddles" doesn't seem to fit in though...could just be me (probably is)

Very powerful imagery though :)

--
Redemption,
I seek it.
Retribution,
I am it.

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